Ben
Persistent, rational, relaxed, witty
Son of Tom and Letitia, brother of William and Thomas
Lover of his one cat, family, and food
Who feels thankful for a home, good health, and our country
Who finds happiness in friends, video games, and holidays
Who needs sleep, food, and time to relax
Who gives advice, hugs to his cat, and ideas for dinner
Who fears onions, no internet, and losing things of value
Who would like to see Europe, California, and a blue whale
Who enjoys music, computers, playing ping-pong with his dad
Who likes to wear gray shirts, blue shirts, and sweat pants in the winter
Born in Bridgeport hospital, resident of Easton
Carter
Ben,
Your bio poem was amazing. I really liked the part where you talked about how you want to see Europe and a blue whale. This is a great part because you can absolutely elaborate more. There are little details you can add. For example, where and what in Europe would you like to see? Why would you like to see it? What about seeing a blue whale would be special to you? When you add these things, your writing will just be that much better.
Josh
Ben,
I enjoyed reading your bio poem, thank you for sharing it. I liked the part where you said what you feared because I thought it was really funny. I think that you could have added more about what you like to wear such as why you like to wear them and things like that.
-Brendan