It was a hot morning on July 5, 2020. It was the day after the 4th of july, and I was tired, so I had woken up late. “T! Get out of bed!” I heard my mom say to me startling me. “Okay, I’m coming. Just 5 more minutes.” I told my mom as she exited the room. I got up, and walked down to the kitchen. VRR VRR. I hear my phone buzz and check my phone. It was a call from Connor. “Hey, wanna go fishing at the lake?” He asked. “Sure. What time are you thinking?” I asked. “Now.” He demanded. “Ok. Want a ride?” I questioned. “Sure.” He replied. My mom and I hopped in the car and headed to Connor’s house. HONK HONK. My mom honked the car for Connor. We headed up to the lake, and my mom dropped us off. “Be safe!” She yelled out the car window. As we walked down the path, I asked Connor, “Wanna go to this spot first? It looks pretty good. It’s in the shade.” I asked Connor. “Yeah sure.” He responded back to me. We got to the spot, set up our rods, and began fishing. It was 15 minutes in, and no bites. “If we don’t get a bite in the next few minutes, wanna change spots?” Connor asked. “Sure. Lets try a little longer here.” I threw my bait in, and hoped for the best. “I got one on!” I yelled. “Bring it in!” He yelled back. Now I had to land the fish. “Got it!” I yelled. “Nice catch T!” Connor congratulated me. “Get the scale.” I told Connor. “It’s 3.5 pounds!” I yelled in joy.
Hey t, Great story this brought back a lot of memories. I really like the way you used dialogue. This really made me, the reader, more interested.
Really cool story you used alot of senses which is good for the reader as it pulls us more into the story.
Hey, Tj Great story I love how accurate you where with your writing
I really like how you set the scene and how you we able to hook me by not telling everything that was going on right away.
I liked how your dialogue really brought me in the moment