Derek
Outgoing, Humorous, Adventurous, Interesting
Son of Brian and Shari, Brother of Danny and Drew
lover of Sports, dogs, and food
Who feels thankful for Thanksgiving, family, and life
Who finds happiness in orange juice, watching Sunday night football, and summer
Who needs sleep, help, and my phone
Who gives humor, support, and caringness
Who fears Monday’s, school, and death
Who would like to see the rest of the world, the Chicago Bears win a superbowl, and the inside of a plane
Who enjoys hanging out with friends, football, and baseball
Who likes to wear weird shirts, long socks, and cleats
Born in Bridgeport, Resident of Easton
Williams
Derek,
I thoroughly enjoyed your piece and thank you for sharing it. I really liked the line,”Who finds happiness in orange juice, Sunday Night Football, and summer.” I felt a connection to that line. I, too find happiness in Sunday Night Football. To me it symbolizes the end of the weekend. I think something that will enhance your writing is digging deeper into your description and add more adjectives to your nouns. For example, add describing words to the line about what clothes you wear. I think that will really help your writing.
Max B.
Derek,
I loved you bio-poem, especially the part about fearing Mondays, school and death. I can really connect with that because they are some of my fears too. I think that you can improve upon one line, seeing the inside of an air plane that i think you could add more description and it would bring your writing to a new level.
Charlie
p.s, I don’t know about the Bears
Hey Derek I really enjoyed your post my favorite line was Who finds happiness in orange juice, watching Sunday night football, and summer because it shows that you give humor and a lover of sports something that i think you could add onto your writing is a little bit more description of some of the words such as adjectives but other than Great piece
Andrew L
Dear Derek
i like how you described how you find happiness in football and the love you have for sports, dogs and food,
Tommy